- Low brass students
- True Blood/Twilight Fans
- ID Discovery crime show fans
- Kappa Kappa Psi
- Political fans
This is way too many audiences, I would slim the plot down to one or two of these, maybe just True Blood/ID discovery.
I have thought about writing a novel myself, and one thing I always notice is that there is one big plot and comes together in the end through plots between minor characters. So basically it is 4 or 5 scenarios going on that eventually meet as one.
Look at some books that popular authors out there do
Dan Brown (mix of art, religion, and history) they all work as one, right now your web in my opinion is just way too big.
Just my opinion, good luck!!