Posted by native dancer the rain and the last well you may respond oh i say you mean like you said i said she gave me up but you never said that you say yes i did i say but only when
on 10/29/2002, 4:55 pm
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i think i will never be able to say
lifts its hair from
a stone
without getting the giggles
time you began a poem that started
out to tell somebody what
he had done like that one that went
you said she gave you
up for a dentist i mean doesnt the person know what
he said why not he said
like he said she gave him up for a dentist
its not poetic
to just say he said she said and besides
you said is more intimate
and disarms the reader and forces him to become
if for only that moment
the you
i was referring to
you said
you were going to write a poem but it wasnt
poetic enough
until you put me in it and put
words in my mouth
that i either never said at all or else said
if memory serves
a hell of a lot better like
for a dentist but what
i really said was she gave me up for a dentist
who was ready to retire at forty
not because he
was that wealthy but because teeth
had lost their excitement and all he could think about
day and night was
powerball
you never said
any such thing because how could you when
you never even met this person
you say so like that one you did about
your father
where you say why was it i could never please you
and why did i have to wait
to say
i love you till after you died is he supposed
to hear you say it now or what
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